I decided to add a new section at the beginning of The Viper’s Fangs to deal with the changes I made in the previous books. Once I finish that, I should only need to improve the writing of the original, make changes to keep it consistent with the previous books, and add a few chapters (mainly by moving them from the first section of Angst). However, this project is currently on hold because it sounds like I’ll be getting covers for Book 1: The Magic of Skein and Book 2: The Tiger’s Eye soon. I’ll be proofreading / tinkering with those two so they can be published. I don’t expect it to take that long, since I’ll mainly be reading it, looking for errors, and tinkering with the descriptions. I may need to tighten up the flashbacks of Voltari’s lessons, but I won’t have to rewrite or add new content.


Finished with The Tiger’s Eye — Sort Of

The revision of The Tiger’s Eye is done, but I still need to proofread / tweak it. I will do that after I proofread / tweak The Magic of Skein. Once I have them done, I’ll start revising The Viper’s Fangs and continue with I Will Be King. I have some other things I need to focus on for the next few days, so I won’t get much writing done until after I finish up with them. So, don’t expect another update for at least a week or two.

Here are the chapters of The Tiger’s Eye (second edition) as they relate to the original content of The Tiger’s Eye. The notations reflect the following: M indicates there were minimal changes made to the original text; N indicates a new chapter; R indicates the original chapter was revised significantly while retaining (some of) its basic content; and W indicates the chapter was rewritten without significantly modifying its content. The chapter # is for The Tiger’s Eye (second edition) and does not correspond to the chapter # for original version. If the chapter is in parentheses (), it indicates it was moved from Book 4, Angst.

Prologue: (1) M

Section 1: Trial and Tribulations

M: Ch 7, (18)
W: Ch 4
R: Ch 23
N: Ch 1-3, 5, 6, 8-17, 19-22

Section 2: The Banner of the Wounded Hand

W: Ch 4, 5, 7,
R: Ch (1), 3, 9, 11, 13-15, 19, 21
N: Ch 2, 6, 8, 10, 12, 16-18, 20, 22, 23

Section 3: The Plateau

M: Ch 13
W: Ch 11-12
R: Ch 1-3, 5-9, 15, 17, 19, 21, 22, 24, 27-29
N: Ch 4, 10, 14, 16, 18, 20, 23, 25, 26, 30


R: Ch 1, 2, (3)

Quick Update

I’m almost done with the revision of The Tiger’s Eye. I’m hopeful that I’ll be able to finish it this weekend, but I’m not sure if I’ll be able to do it. I need to write / revise 4 or 5 more chapters (which takes time) and review the epilogue (which should go quickly). It is already a lot better than the original version, and I need to make sure it ends well. I haven’t done anything with my other writing projects because I want to get through this one.

A Brief Update

I haven’t done anything with I Will Be King or the proofreading for Book 0: Magic. However, I am changing the title for Book 0 to The Magic of Skein. (Skein is the name I’ve decided to give to the world of the Angus the Mage series.)

I finished the second section of Book 1: The Tiger’s Eye yesterday, and I am ready to start on the last section. It should be more revising what is there to improve the writing than doing a complete rewrite, so it should go more quickly. (The changes I’ve made up to this point shouldn’t have too much impact on the plot /events in this section, and there will only be a few new chapters.) If it goes as I hope it will, I may have it ready to proofread by the end of the year.

I will be talking to my sister about covers this week, and once I get the proofreading done for Book 0 and Book 1, I plan to publish both of them. I also plan to publish my novella “Weary.”

“Weary” is set in Skein and I am developing something like Heinlein’s Future History timeline. Heinlein used many of his characters in multiple works on a common timeline in the science fiction universe he created. It was sometimes necessary to read an earlier novel / story in that timeline to fully appreciate / understand other novels / stories. Right now, in the timeline of Skein, The Drunken Wizards Playmates occurs before The Taming, “Weary” occurs several centuries after The Taming, and The Angus the Mage Series occurs several centuries after “Weary.” However, since “Weary” includes characters that appear in The Angus the Mage series, a richer reading experience may be had if it is read after Book 2: The Viper’s Fangs and before Book 3: The Golden Key. (I may wait to publish it until after I have revised Book 2.)


Angus the Mage: Second Edition

  1. Book 0: Magic: I have proofread the first chapter. I am somewhat reluctant to continue, since I’d like to go through it after I finish with The Tiger’s Eye.
  2. Book 1: The Tiger’s Eye: I am almost done with the new section. It is up to 19 chapters, and I have one to (completely) rewrite from the First Edition version, a second one to write from scratch, and a third to proofread (it’s from Angst, but I may move it to later in the book). After that, it will be revising / rewriting what I wrote the first time and adding new scenes to it.

I Will Be King: I am proofreading when I need a break from The Tiger’s Eye and have gotten through about 15 chapters.


I have not done anything with Book 0: Magic since my last update. I needed a break from it so I can look at it with fresh eyes when I proofread / revise it.

I have finished “Weary.” It ended up being a 22,000-word novella. It is set in the same world (Skein) as the Angus the Mage series and predates it by several centuries. It is a sort-of prelude to The Golden Key, and I may end up adding it as such in the second edition. Before I do anything else with it, though, I plan to submit it to a few magazines to see if they’ll publish it.

I have written / revised a half dozen chapters for the new section of Book 1: The Tiger’s Eye, and I’ve made notes for about a dozen more scenes. I like what I’ve done so far, and it is developing nicely.

I have begun proofreading what I had written for I Will Be King as preparation for finishing it. I haven’t looked at it in about 5 years, and I’m wondering why I stopped working on it. The writing is good, and so is the storyline and characters.

Book 0: Magic

If you have been following my updates, you know the revision of The Tiger’s Eye has led to a dramatic increase in its length. I have just finished with the first two sections (“Angus” and “Hellsbreath”), and they have expanded into three that are longer than the original novel. I am taking a brief break from working on it while I wait for feedback from my mom, and then I will proofread it / check for consistency. Once I’ve done that, I will have a decision to make: Do I self-publish it, or do I try to get an agent / publisher. I’m not sure which route I will take, but if I decide to self-publish it, it will be as Book 0 with the title of Magic.

At the same time, I have another major decision to make: Do I continue revising The Tiger’s Eye or do I finish I Will Be King? On the one hand, I have already mapped out most of a new section to add to The Tiger’s Eye before I revise the last two sections of the original text, and it is still very fresh in my mind. However, it will likely take at least three months to finish it. On the other hand, I am about 80% of the way through I Will Be King, but I will need to reread what I’ve already done before I continue with it. I think it will take about two months to finish it, but it will probably take longer. I’m not sure which one I will do–and I might decide to work on both of them.

Here are the chapters of Magic as they relate to the original content of The Tiger’s Eye. The notations reflect the following: M indicates there were minimal changes made to the original text; N indicates a new chapter; R indicates the original chapter was revised significantly while retaining its basic content; and W indicates the chapter was rewritten without significantly modifying its content. The chapter # is for Magic and does not correspond to the chapter # for The Tiger’s Eye.

Section 1: Angus

M: Ch 1-4
W: Ch 5, 6, 13, 16, 17
R: Ch 7-10 R
N: Ch 11, 12, 14, 15 N

Section 2: The South Road

W: Ch 11, 14, 16-22
R: Ch 24
N: Ch 1-10, 12, 13, 15, 23, 25, 26

Section 3: Hellsbreath

W: Ch 3
R: Ch 1, 2, 19
N: Ch 4-18

Epilogue: M

Very Brief Update

Well, it’s taking longer than I thought it would to finish the section I’m on, but I only have one chapter left to revise, and I don’t anticipate making any major changes in it. Once I finish it, I’ll either start on the “Hellsbreath” section of the original or go through the revisions I’ve made so far to proofread / tweak them. I think I’m through the time-consuming changes, but I’m a much different (and better!) writer than I was when I wrote the first edition, and it’s almost like writing a new book. In fact, what I’ve done so far is almost as long as the original book was, and I’ve only revised the first section (“Angus”) and added a new one (“The South Road”). There are three more sections to revise….

Brief Update

I’m still working on the revision of The Tiger’s Eye. I’ve added about 47,000 words to it so far, and I think I’m at the place where it will begin to go more quickly. At least, I should be retaining a lot more of the original version from here on out, and the additions should be parts of chapters (flashbacks of Voltari’s lessons, a little worldbuilding) rather than new ones (although there may be a few more of those, as well). I’ll know for sure once I get through the next few chapters. I expect to do that by this weekend.

Writing Update

Well, I have done some writing since my last update, but it is still rather slow going. Here’s why:

    • “Bait,” the mystery I’ve started, is on hold for the moment, but I have thought about what the next few scenes might be like. I need to work out the plot a bit more because I need to have a better idea about where it is going and how it’s going to get there before I go much further into the story. In other words, I’m thinking about it, but I’m not ready to write more of it yet. I may also have to read up on writing detective fiction, since the investigative elements may be more prominent than in my other mystery stories.
    • I have a good start on a fantasy story I’ve tentatively titled, “Weary.” It’s set in the same world as my Angus series (I think I’ll call that world “Skein”) and relates to some things that take place in that series. However, like “Bait,” I need to do a bit of thinking before I go much further on it. (I have a major decision to make about the nature of the conflict between the two main characters, and I also need to think of an apt name for one of them.)
    • I have been spending more time writing over the past few weeks, so I am confident that I will build on what I started for “Bait” and “Weary” when I feel the creative urge to do so.
    • I have been overhauling The Tiger’s Eye to address several issues with the way it was written. It was my first “real” novel, and I have learned a lot about writing novels since then, and I’m putting that knowledge into practice. I am nearing the end of the first section (“Angus”), and I think it will go more quickly after that because there will be more dialogue and character interaction than in the first section. Here are some of the things I’ve been doing:
      • World-Building: I have a much better conception of the world the series is set in than when I wrote The Tiger’s Eye, and I am bringing some of that into the story. I am also making the series more consistent, especially with regards to the use of magic and social conventions that occur later in the series but not early on.
      • Character Development: I have added quite a bit of internal dialogue and flashbacks for Angus, and I think he is a richer character because of it. One of the main reasons for doing this is to show things instead of telling them. I do this well when I have character interactions, action, and dialogue, but there were places in the first section that were terrible. For instance, when Angus looks at the map in chapter 6 in the original version, I described it as I saw it, not as Angus saw it. That is, I told the reader what was on the map instead of having Angus discovering what was on the map, and what I knew of the map and what Angus should have known about the map are entirely different things.
      • New Scenes: Again, this relates to the “show and tell” errors, since there were times when I should have had a scene describing the events instead of a few sentences telling the reader about them. Although I’m sure I haven’t fixed all of these, I have expanded upon parts of scenes and added new ones with character interaction. For example, I mention a claustrophobic dwarf in the original version, but in this one, I have a brief encounter with the dwarf that does a bit of foreshadowing and gives a different reason for him being “Topside.”
      • Viewpoint and Authorial Intrusion: A lot of the changes I am making stem from problems with viewpoint and ignoring the limitations of the character’s knowledge. Angus doesn’t really know anything about the world, and that opens up the opportunity to do a little world-building. As he is learning about this new world, it makes sense that he would think about the situations he encounters and draw upon what he learned from his time with Voltari to help him cope with them. Since the original version had opportunities for expansion that would do that, I have added new scenes and new content.
    • Finally, the revisions are time-consuming. When I started writing the Angus the Mage series, my writing was spontaneous and free-flowing, and it wasn’t unusual for me to write a few thousand words that didn’t need much revision — or, to be more precise, that I didn’t think needed much revision. When I finished the series, I was still writing the first drafts fairly quickly, but then I would rework them several times before I was satisfied with how they turned out. Now, as I go through The Tiger’s Eye, I am applying what I have learned about the revision process, and I think the novel will be much improved as a result. There are still chapters that are essentially unchanged (the first few, for instance), but most of them are quite different from what they were in the first edition. Whether that continues after I finish the first section (i.e., when Angus begins interacting with the other main characters) is yet to be seen. I suspect it will but to a lesser extent because there will be more dialogue and action, less “telling,” and fewer missed opportunities for world-building.